Greetings and Salutations once again from the swamp,
Hang over sleep
I’m speaking softly because some of us are still suffering from the aftermath of the party. Thanks to everyone who sent messages of support for Mischievous. He in particular is still not flying straight. He claims his bird-napping traumatized him. I might have to send him for psychotherapy. We’ll interview Mischievous next week, at that time we’ll get an exclusive on the details of his abduction and imprisonment. Now onto to this weeks topic.
I’ve only just completed polishing the first fifty pages of my novel. Thanks to the vertically challenged Evil Ones, I had much to consider. Editing is like spring cleaning, no one wants to do it, but everyone feels better after they’ve put it behind them. Elmore Leonard has ten rules for writing which can easily be applied to editing. So I’m going to post them here because some things bear repeating.
WRITERS ON WRITING; Easy on the Adverbs, Exclamation Points and Especially Hooptedoodle
By ELMORE LEONARD
Published: July 16, 2001 in the NEW YORK TIMES
These are rules I’ve picked up along the way to help me remain invisible when I’m writing a book, to help me show rather than tell what’s taking place in the story. If you have a facility for language and imagery and the sound of your voice pleases you, invisibility is not what you are after, and you can skip the rules. Still, you might look them over.
1. Never open a book with weather.
If it’s only to create atmosphere, and not a character’s reaction to the weather, you don’t want to go on too long. The reader is apt to leaf ahead looking for people. There are exceptions. If you happen to be Barry Lopez, who has more ways to describe ice and snow than an Eskimo, you can do all the weather reporting you want.
2. Avoid prologues.
They can be annoying, especially a prologue following an introduction that comes after a foreword. But these are ordinarily found in nonfiction. A prologue in a novel is backstory, and you can drop it in anywhere you want.
There is a prologue in John Steinbeck’s ”Sweet Thursday,” but it’s O.K. because a character in the book makes the point of what my rules are all about. He says: ”I like a lot of talk in a book and I don’t like to have nobody tell me what the guy that’s talking looks like. I want to figure out what he looks like from the way he talks. . . . figure out what the guy’s thinking from what he says. I like some description but not too much of that. . . . Sometimes I want a book to break loose with a bunch of hooptedoodle. . . . Spin up some pretty words maybe or sing a little song with language. That’s nice. But I wish it was set aside so I don’t have to read it. I don’t want hooptedoodle to get mixed up with the story.”
3. Never use a verb other than ”said” to carry dialogue.
The line of dialogue belongs to the character; the verb is the writer sticking his nose in. But said is far less intrusive than grumbled, gasped, cautioned, lied. I once noticed Mary McCarthy ending a line of dialogue with ”she asseverated,” and had to stop reading to get the dictionary.
4. Never use an adverb to modify the verb ”said” . . .
. . . he admonished gravely. To use an adverb this way (or almost any way) is a mortal sin. The writer is now exposing himself in earnest, using a word that distracts and can interrupt the rhythm of the exchange. I have a character in one of my books tell how she used to write historical romances ”full of rape and adverbs.”
5. Keep your exclamation points under control.
You are allowed no more than two or three per 100,000 words of prose. If you have the knack of playing with exclaimers the way Tom Wolfe does, you can throw them in by the handful.
6. Never use the words ”suddenly” or ”all hell broke loose.”
This rule doesn’t require an explanation. I have noticed that writers who use ”suddenly” tend to exercise less control in the application of exclamation points.
7. Use regional dialect, patois, sparingly.
Once you start spelling words in dialogue phonetically and loading the page with apostrophes, you won’t be able to stop. Notice the way Annie Proulx captures the flavor of Wyoming voices in her book of short stories ”Close Range.”
8. Avoid detailed descriptions of characters.
Which Steinbeck covered. In Ernest Hemingway’s ”Hills Like White Elephants” what do the ”American and the girl with him” look like? ”She had taken off her hat and put it on the table.” That’s the only reference to a physical description in the story, and yet we see the couple and know them by their tones of voice, with not one adverb in sight.
9. Don’t go into great detail describing places and things.
Unless you’re Margaret Atwood and can paint scenes with language or write landscapes in the style of Jim Harrison. But even if you’re good at it, you don’t want descriptions that bring the action, the flow of the story, to a standstill.
And finally:
10. Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip.
A rule that came to mind in 1983. Think of what you skip reading a novel: thick paragraphs of prose you can see have too many words in them. What the writer is doing, he’s writing, perpetrating hooptedoodle, perhaps taking another shot at the weather, or has gone into the character’s head, and the reader either knows what the guy’s thinking or doesn’t care. I’ll bet you don’t skip dialogue.
My most important rule is one that sums up the 10.
If it sounds like writing, I rewrite it.
Or, if proper usage gets in the way, it may have to go. I can’t allow what we learned in English composition to disrupt the sound and rhythm of the narrative. It’s my attempt to remain invisible, not distract the reader from the story with obvious writing. (Joseph Conrad said something about words getting in the way of what you want to say.)
If I write in scenes and always from the point of view of a particular character — the one whose view best brings the scene to life — I’m able to concentrate on the voices of the characters telling you who they are and how they feel about what they see and what’s going on, and I’m nowhere in sight.
What Steinbeck did in ”Sweet Thursday” was title his chapters as an indication, though obscure, of what they cover. ”Whom the Gods Love They Drive Nuts” is one, ”Lousy Wednesday” another. The third chapter is titled ”Hooptedoodle 1” and the 38th chapter ”Hooptedoodle 2” as warnings to the reader, as if Steinbeck is saying: ”Here’s where you’ll see me taking flights of fancy with my writing, and it won’t get in the way of the story. Skip them if you want.”
”Sweet Thursday” came out in 1954, when I was just beginning to be published, and I’ve never forgotten that prologue.
Did I read the hooptedoodle chapters? Every word.
My personal favorite, # 10, “If proper usage gets in the way it may have to go.” Mr. Leonard’s new book Back On The Case is in a store near you. Be sure to check it out.
So now, I don’t feel worthy. I may have to go through my novel again looking for those pesky adverbs, they’re like rabbits I tell you they multiply when you’re not looking. Also searching for any all modifiers. A writers work is never done.
I’ll see you all next week. Until then I’ll leave you with this.
“Psychopaths… people who know the differences between right and wrong, but don’t give a shit. That’s what most of my characters are like.”
― Elmore Leonard
Write On,
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about everything they could find and I installed new accent lighting in the gardens. It looks very nice, but that’s not what I meant to do with my time. The other reason for my sudden departure is I haven’t heard from Mischievous Raven and that worries me. As you know he was abducted a while back and held for ransom by The Three Misfiteers. Although I fulfilled my part of the bargain to obtain his release, which required me to submit their novel out to literary agents. I admit that I’ve slacked off for the past two months. And those three are not above taking my good friend and confidant again. So I’m heading back to The Swamp today to check on my friend. My muse has the armored Humvee here and he’s agreed to drop me off. That saves me a trip through the Impenetrable Forrest.
Today we’re going to talk about Stephen King’s most recent work, The Wind Through The Keyhole. I openly admit to being a huge fan of Mr. King. Also known as The Master around The Swamp. The critics were pretty cool on this book. One said, it was disappointing because it did not further the Gunslinger story at all. While it is true that it does nothing to further the series, it is a great tale in its own right. The Wind Through the Keyhole is a story within a story within another story. And while it takes its place right in the middle of the Gunslinger series, it gives some insights into the characters that we already know and have come to love. Roland and his ka-tet– Jake, Susanna, Eddie and Oy, the billy-bumbler have to hunker down to ride out a storm. To pass the time Roland tells them a story about himself as a young gunslinger, in which he tells a young boy a story to keep his mind off the difficult task Roland has put upon him.
